I'm working on a potential design for a t-shirt and I wanted some opinions on how I could make it better. I'm hoping to submit it to threadless tees, and I tried getting some critique by posting it over there, but I generated almost no responses, which ... wasn't helpful. I ran this past carnet, and she said it was fine if I posted it to the list. So on that note, I'll put everything behind a cut.
Here is the design itself as it stands currently:
And here, I put it overtop one of the t-shirt templates on a color not black:
Tell me what you think. :) I really would like to make it the best it can be, so any help/advice/suggestions is honestly appreciated.